Harry, the snake was gone.
Tom said, "Shhhh!" to the class. He found it again. He saw it marching towards the hole in the wall. He tried to catch it but it slid into the hole in the wall.
Miss Anderson was really angry.
Tom had an idea. He got some supplies from the classroom like Miss Anderson's lunch. He also got some paper, glue and wire, then he got the paper and glued it together, then he got the wire and tied it around the paper.
Finally Miss Anderson's lunch. The snake slowly slid across the green slimy soft rug. It took a bite then they put him back into the backpack.
"Don't bring a snake to school again," said Miss Anderson."
Tom said, "Shhhh!" to the class. He found it again. He saw it marching towards the hole in the wall. He tried to catch it but it slid into the hole in the wall.
Miss Anderson was really angry.
Tom had an idea. He got some supplies from the classroom like Miss Anderson's lunch. He also got some paper, glue and wire, then he got the paper and glued it together, then he got the wire and tied it around the paper.
Finally Miss Anderson's lunch. The snake slowly slid across the green slimy soft rug. It took a bite then they put him back into the backpack.
"Don't bring a snake to school again," said Miss Anderson."
Well done, Caleb. You
are having a go at using speech marks. Look at 'then' in your story - too many.
Use words like, Next, After he got the paper, glue and wire, he
glued the paper together. After it took a bite, they put it back in the
backpack.
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